This is it...going out tommorow Forum

[jrobby6]

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[hjjs22]

only one typo that I could spot, you left out "the" right before the word pastor in the 3rd paragraph.

overall very good, best of luck

[Neelio]

very compelling... "my time spent in my old neighborhood" should be "the time I spent in my old neighborhood"

one of the best PS I have read on TLS.

[BruceBarr]

Really good stuff man. Good read. Now, I'm not an English major (i.e. I'm not sure if these are right or wrong), but here are a few things I saw that may be wrong? I dunno... ha. You tell me.

Those whom I believed were my friends, wanted me to engage in horrendous activities, but I could never do it.

Comma needed?


I’m not sure how to explain it but my time spent that summer had enlightened me for the better. I told one of pastors at my church about my situation and he simply put it like this “you knew a world of innocence, when you were blind; now you fear a world of terror and have opened your eyes.”

Should there be a colon or something? It seems to not flow.

[jrobby6]

I agree with all the replies thus far. I will def be making those corrections later on. Any other comments? Would appreciate some last minute criticism.